Jun 07 2007
The Sentence Pyramid
One of the first mistakes beginning writers make is that they use too many adverbs. This is probably due to a number of misguided efforts aimed at making writing more vivid:
1) the beginning writer’s desire to cram as many detail words as possible into every sentence
2) the notion that adding adverbs makes writing more active
3) the new writer’s mistaken reliance on descriptive words instead of a combination of descriptive phrases and good detail selection
How can one avoid flabby writing? By having a balanced word diet. Here’s a plan I recommend:
The words you provide to readers should be rich in nouns and verbs. They’re nutritious. Basic punctuation is, of course, necessary but only in smaller quantities. The same is true of adjectives. If you’re tossing in handfuls of commas and em-dashes, or layering multiple adjectives on a single noun, you’re writing will start to become unhealthy.
Finally, adverbs should be sprinkled only lightly throughout your work. If readers have ground through a page of solid nouns with only sparse use of adjectives and essential punctuation, then allow them to have an adverb for sweetening.
